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I Did It All For You
The song “Still I Am Alone” was playing in the Impala, wind caressing Dean’s face. The night was dark without any stars and moon. Dean had been driving for a while and there was no motel since he left the last town.
“Ha!” The inconspicuous light caught Dean’s eye while he drove through the little town. He reversed the Impala hastily and parked in front of the pub. He couldn’t wait to have a drink and rest.
Dean stepped into the pub. The strong damp and filthy smell caught Dean’s senses.
“Yuck! What’s that smell!” Dean wrinkled his nose with disgust. He felt uneasy but he needed a drink!!
“Give me a whiskey. Make it a double!!” Dean said to the barman who was chatting to a blond beauty.
“Give me a whiskey. Make it a double!!” Dean said to the barman who was chatting to a blond beauty.
The barman nodded his head. The blonde gave Dean a very sweet smile. “What a babe!” Dean thought and gave her a wink.
The barman placed the whisky in front of Dean with a weird expression on his face.
The barman placed the whisky in front of Dean with a weird expression on his face.
” Here’s your double, sir!.”
“Fuck, fuck all this supernatural stuff...” muttered Dean, gulping down the shot. He was thirsty and tired.
Dean tapped the bar table without looking up. How could this happen? He had been very careful. Dean stared at the glass and tried to figure out what went wrong.
“ Ha Ha Ha…!!” The blonde ‘s squeaky laughter interrupted Dean’s thoughts. The high pitched laughter made Dean shiver. He shook his head trying to get the thoughts out of his mind.
A cockroach was slowly crawling towards to Dean’s glass, Dean squashed it with disgust, then flicked it away. Another one, no, two, three..
“What the hell…” Dean groaned.
“ Hey handsome! Are you alright?” The blonde beauty said with a graceful voice.
“This pub needs some cleaning up, don’t you think?” Dean stamped more cockroaches which were wandering around his feet.
There was a smirk on her face.
“Mmm..” The blonde leaned forward to kiss Dean.
Dean smiled. They kissed. Then he noticed something in his mouth.
“Hold..Hold..” Dean pushed the blonde away from him.
“What the … “ Dean spat.
“What the … “ Dean spat.
A cockroach!!
Dean felt sick.
He was stunned with what he saw next.
Cockroaches were crawling out from her mouth, eyes, nose.. and started to surround Dean rapidly.
Cockroaches were crawling out from her mouth, eyes, nose.. and started to surround Dean rapidly.
Dean looked around the pub trying to get some help. What surprised Dean was, the cockroaches had flowed over people but they seemed not mind, still chatting, drinking and playing.
“Crazy bastards! Can’t I just have some peace and quiet? Well, that’s something you don’t see everyday.” Dean shook his head and shrugged.
He tried to flick them, slam them, crush them, squeeze them, punch them. He used most every way to get rid of them but he failed. The cockroaches seemed unstoppable!
“You are mine, he he he…” the creepy voice made Dean shiver more.
While he was struggling, the door suddenly burst open. Castiel stormed in, stepped on some cockroaches, making crunchy sounds as he crossed the room towards Dean.
“Just need some help here.” Dean was pleased to see Castiel.
Castiel looked at the blonde a second, then pushed her away from Dean.
He grabbed Dean’s chest and slammed him against the wall.
It happened too fast. Dean didn’t have a second to react to what was going on.
Castiel’s fist came down heavily. Dean’s face ached. He could feel blood come out from his corner of his mouth.
The hard punch made Castiel puff. The anger, sadness and disappointment were in his beautiful cold blue eyes.
“You son of a bitch. I believed in you…” roared Castiel.
“How can you do this to me!!” Castiel bitterly stared at Dean.
“Hey man, calm down…” Dean stared at Castiel.
Castiel continued, “ You are the hero. I looked out for you all the time. I was there when you were sad. I was there when you were in danger. I was there when you were lost. I even brought you back from hell. ….” Tears rolled down Castiel’s face.
Castiel continued, “ You are the hero. I looked out for you all the time. I was there when you were sad. I was there when you were in danger. I was there when you were lost. I even brought you back from hell. ….” Tears rolled down Castiel’s face.
“Cas…” Dean looked at him with sympathy in his eyes. He noticed that the cockroaches had started climb on them.
“Cas..” Dean softened his voice and tried to comfort Castiel.
“It’s not what you think, it’s just…”
“ Just what??” Castiel interrupted Dean.
“Get me out of here and I will explain !” Dean commanded.
Castiel looked at Dean, his eyes filled with emotion.
Castiel grabbed Dean’s hand, heading to the front door.
“Hold on a sec. Who or what are they? What do they want me for ?”
“Cockroaches!! Food!!” Castiel said with a deadpan look.

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ReplyDeleteHey Minchi. Awesome edit, still a great story :)
ReplyDeleteJust a couple of things -
With the bar scene, at the start where you are describing it. If Dean isn't at the bar yet, it might be good to describe it once he gets to the bar, like we're seeing it through his eyes. Or you could put that "It was known for being..." etc.
Also 'There were a couple who looked like lovers,' should be - There WAS a couple who.. etc
Also when a person is talking a lot at once, you could probably put it in one paragraph, rather then a new line. And just use new lines for when a new person is talking.
Sometimes it works ok if you're describing things inbetween each time one person talks, but when you have something like -
“You son of a bitch. I believed in you…” roared Castiel.
“How can you do this to me!!” Castiel bitterly stared at Dean.
You should probably just go
“You son of a bitch. I believed in you…” roared Castiel. “How can you do this to me!!” Castiel bitterly stared at Dean.
Otherwise though I really love it :)
The way you describe things and situations is really enjoyable. I especially loved the part where Cas walked towards dead making crunching sounds as he stepped on cockroaches haha. It made me shudder.
Awesome story :)